What about a proper title?

Option 1:

Who, among us, has never dreamed of himself doing something big alone? I once dreamed (of) myself as a manager of a big company, which works to prevent racism. In the dream I succeeded and the world was free from(ww.) racism thanks to me. But that was (a) dream.  In real life an individual can make minor changes, but he can't make meaningful changes by himself.

In my opinion, the individual in the society can't make a difference because (of) the following reasons. First, an individual needs assistance. In order to make a big change people prefer to work in groups than work by themselves. For example, people who want to make a change usually join political parties or existing groups rather than create their own group. I think that assistance from other people is necessary to make a difference.

In addition, the effect that the individual has on its society is small. To make a difference or a change in the society you have to convince people to believe in what you believe. I think that one person, as charismatic as he is, can't affect the whole society by himself. The society is usually affected by the media and formal associations, and isn't affected by an individual. However, I think that an individual can convince his local environment to believe in what he believes.

To conclude, an individual can't make a difference which is (what?) all by him, but he can make it in different ways. An individual can join formal groups and influence the society(ww.) within the groups. Moreover, an individual can create a group which can make a difference in the society, just like in my dream.

Excellent work and so interesting!
(94)
Daphna

When children grow up and turn into teenagers they naturally ask for more independency(ww.-independence). They want to go out to different places, stay away from home and many more(ww.- have other) requests. Parents, on the other hand, don't always agree to all(ww.-everything) their children want. From this point of disagreement between children and parents the way to an argument is very short. No one likes to argue, so why does in(ww.) happening(gr.)?

I think it happens because of the generation gap between the parents and the teenagers. Nowadays, teenagers go out all the time, unlike their parents who tended to stay home when they were young. This generation gap causes misunderstandings and confusion between teenagers and parents. For example, my relationship with my parents suffers from this generation gap, too, especially when I ask to go out on Friday nights.

In addition, arguments between teenagers and their parents may happen because the parents are too concerned about their children. Parents always try to protect their children. However, sometimes they are worried without a reason and it makes their children frustrated. This is exactly what happens with my parents. When I ask to go out sometimes they say, "This place isn't for children your age" while I know there are children  my age, who go to those places.

To conclude, arguments between parents and teenagers are a known phenomenon, which almost every teenager has experienced. I think that the arguments can be prevented by making an organized list of things the teenagers are allowed to do and things they aren't allowed. In worse cases I recommend the family to see a psychologist.

Better.

(94)

Daphna

 There are many different ways to do sports. You can jump, run, kick, throw and swim. All the mentioned activities are divided into two different groups: team sports and individual sports. Usually team sports, like football and basketball, are the more popular and individual sports, like tennis and marathon running, are the more prestigious ones, therefore different people prefer different sports.- Very good opening!

In my opinion, individual sports are superior to team sports, because when you do some kind of sport alone, all the  responsibility is yours and there is no one who can let you down and hamper your chances to win. As a result of that, I think that naturally, individual athletes are more responsible for their lives than athletes who play in a group since they are used to cope(gr.-coping) with pressure alone. For example, there are many footballers who are in financial difficulties although they earn millions of dollars, because they aren't responsible for their personal life.

In addition, individual sports are more exhausting than team sports. This makes them more dramatic and more interesting to watch. I think that watching one person struggling so hard to achieve his aim makes individual sports interesting and thrilling. For example, a tennis player who tries to hit the ball back to his opponent and activates a lot of muscles in this strike is a very dramatic scene to watch. On the other hand, in team sports the effort of the game is divided between all the members of the team.

In conclusion, I prefer individual sports rather than team sports because they teach responsibility and are more dramatic. Nevertheless, I love both kinds of sports and recommend to everyone who can, to engage in sports on a regular basis, either individual sports or team sports.

Excellent!.

(100)

Daphna